tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19242073.post113570542796290206..comments2023-05-23T07:26:02.563-06:00Comments on Spilled To Bloodlessness: "Perspired temple" [a reply-poem]Unknownnoreply@blogger.comBlogger7125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19242073.post-1135833310609871142005-12-28T22:15:00.000-07:002005-12-28T22:15:00.000-07:00I like the subtlety and economy in this poem. Espe...I like the subtlety and economy in this poem. Especially the closing stanza. :-)Innocent Bullethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11640567143543918149noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19242073.post-1135784895341337802005-12-28T08:48:00.000-07:002005-12-28T08:48:00.000-07:00When I questioned  her (painfully)..."Or was ...<B>When I questioned<BR/>  her (painfully)...<BR/><BR/><I>"Or was it the corpse<BR/>  of you and me,<BR/>of a love once dear,<BR/>now mournfully dead?"</I><BR/><BR/>she but shook her<BR/>head (distainfully)<BR/><BR/>"...or was it merely<BR/>a falling leaf fall<BR/>had forgotten?..."<BR/><BR/>she (strangely)<BR/>sat smiling --<BR/>but<BR/>  never said</B><BR/><BR/>d.i.david raphael israelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16621521896693000470noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19242073.post-1135776853259169212005-12-28T06:34:00.000-07:002005-12-28T06:34:00.000-07:00Thanks a ton for having me here EoR, I am already ...Thanks a ton for having me here EoR, I am already it loving it here!:)Shilpa Bhatnagarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15971456418692561039noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19242073.post-1135776750905806572005-12-28T06:32:00.000-07:002005-12-28T06:32:00.000-07:00..But walking awayo’er the shoulderthe corner of m...<B><EM>..But walking away<BR/>o’er the shoulder<BR/>the corner of my eye did catch<BR/>a dark leafy silhouette<BR/>dropping from its perch, low<BR/>- a slow molten pirouette<BR/>Dusk setting its edges aglow <BR/><BR/><BR/>Or was it the corpse<BR/>of you and me,<BR/>of a love once dear,<BR/>now mournfully dead?</EM></B><BR/><BR/><BR/><BR/>Over to you, D.Shilpa Bhatnagarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15971456418692561039noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19242073.post-1135770534965234412005-12-28T04:48:00.000-07:002005-12-28T04:48:00.000-07:00Oh, it is great to have you both! Such poetry! And...Oh, it is great to have you both! Such poetry! And Shilpa, I know the world has a way of getting mixed up in our poetic production--I'm working on one right now. But I am so glad to have both of you on board. It's great!Enemy of the Republichttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17342253341470198835noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19242073.post-1135766059991315012005-12-28T03:34:00.000-07:002005-12-28T03:34:00.000-07:00well!not leavingwell enough alone --here further p...well!<BR/><BR/>not leaving<BR/>well enough alone --<BR/>here further play w/<BR/>the tiles of words:<BR/><BR/><BR/><I>was it a moist glint<BR/>that i caught in your eye?</I><BR/>was it the winter evening<BR/>that provoked my tremble?<BR/><I>...and walking away<BR/>o'er the soulder</I><BR/>what did the dark<BR/>branch resemble?<BR/><BR/><BR/>cheers! & thanks,<BR/>d.idavid raphael israelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16621521896693000470noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-19242073.post-1135748460803728732005-12-27T22:41:00.000-07:002005-12-27T22:41:00.000-07:00..and walking awayo'er the shouldercast a last gla...<B><EM>..and walking away<BR/>o'er the shoulder<BR/>cast a last glance<BR/>at what couldn’t be<BR/><BR/>was it a moist glint<BR/>that i caught in your eye<BR/>or a sliver of hope<BR/>reflected off the sky?</EM></B><BR/><BR/><BR/>Thanks David! I enjoyed this:)Shilpa Bhatnagarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15971456418692561039noreply@blogger.com